This story has since been updated. You can find it on my personal website.
The setting was breathtaking as the Princes entered the city. It was completely decorated and prepared for the upcoming matrimony. Carriages with royalty of all sorts rode down the streets and bands lined the streets and squares playing joyful music. As the princes approached the palace, a woman caught prince Rama's glance. This single glance was the beginning of a true, lasting love. Although they did not speak, they both knew that they were destined for each other.
Later that evening, Rama entered the room for the wedding. It was decadently designed with gold designs on the walls, frescoes on the ceiling, and white marble floors. Even amidst this beauty, his eyes were immediately drawn to the woman, Sita, dressed in her wedding gowns. Shortly thereafter, the competition began for Sita’s marriage. The King, her father, had promised his daughter to whomever was able to lift his sword. Suitor by suitor came to compete and one by one, they failed. Finally, Rama approached the sword. Before he attempted, he stole one last glance at Sita. It was in this moment that she realized that they were without a doubt meant for each other. Sita was head over heels in love and waited in excruciation for her love to attempt at the sword. The room went completely silent as Rama made his attempt. Rama grabbed the sword with intention and lifted it with unparalleled strength. With a simple flick of his wrist, Rama lifted the sword and proved his worth. The entire room and kingdom celebrated with parties and laughter at the sight of Rama winning the kings daughter.
Authors note:
The original story was set in a temple. I chose to change the setting to a palace with more modern transportation such as carriages. I also tried to tell this entirety of the story with a more relatable sort of language. I also decided to change the weapon from a bow to a sword—in order to maintain the carriage/castle setting.
(Sita and Rama. Taken from flickr)
Source: Nine ideal Indian Women by Devee
Hi Jessie. I really liked your story! I'm a bit of a helpless romantic, and after reading the Ramayana, I thought the idea of being in love after just making eye contact was simultaneously creepy and incredibly romantic. I thought you handled that very well in your story, and I really liked your scenery descriptions! Can't wait to read more of your stuff.
ReplyDeleteHi again! I really liked your version of the story. I like the detail and how you described Rama and Sita's love as not needing words. I also liked your more modern setting. This made the story seem more like a fairytale. I like how you could picture your story. I could picture Rama lifting the sword with little effort. Great job and I look forward to reading more.
ReplyDeleteHi Jessie great job on your story! You definitely took the story and made it your own while still keeping the original story in mind. Adding the fact that Rama and Sita had not met before makes the story a lot more interesting. Great job on your story I look forward to reading more.
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